Little Lucy

English Language Features

One day there was a girl called Lucy who loved licking lollipops. She had a dog as a tiny as a peanut. Suddenly Lucy realised that it was 8 am and she had to go to school. She loved to talk to her friends a lot. Her teacher came marching in and said “We have a maths test today “. A few minutes later they were having the test. All of a sudden Lucy started talking. Her teacher said to her “should you be talking in a maths test?” After that she was an island in the sea. Finally the test was over. Lucy was about to explode from happiness.

2 thoughts on “Little Lucy

  1. Hi Lyndall,
    This was a fun story I loved it. You used a lot of great smilies and metaphors.
    Well done Lyndall!
    Sophie Ryan 6B

  2. Lyndall you have made clever use of language features to enhance your story. I particularly loved the alliteration in the first sentence and the simile you used with the dog and the peanut – well done!
    Mrs Bradford

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